All too often, people write too much in business letters or when requestion information or help.  The reader does not want extra information especially when they are busy.  They want to know what you want and the relevant details.  Don't flower your emails or letters.

This is a message from someone wanting to write a formal letter.

Hi Ma'am,
hope you are fine. Need your guidance again. I have to write and email to my executive. The material would be like this :
Please find enclosed attachment as a highlight of my workingthat i gave discussed with you. Kindly guide me to make it better

My answer....

Bosses do not want to read a load of irrelevant writing. They want precise, to the point with no flowers.

Dear Sir,

Please find the attachment outlining my work profile to date as discussed.

Thank you for your kind consideration in this matter.